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How Not To Use Quotations
"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed
back, but it is generally owing to some kind of
acident if one even notices the old woman under
her load of sticks"

This quote by George shows that people care more
about the donkeys than the people. It also shows
the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that
the donkey could have carried instead and I don't
think it is fair either.
"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed
back, but it is generally owing to some kind of
acident if one even notices the old woman under
her load of sticks"

This quote by George shows that people care more
about the donkeys than the people. It also shows
the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that
the donkey could have carried instead and I don't
think it is fair either.
Spelling Errors are
   You must always
                                     unforgivable in a
introduce a quotation!
                                        quotation!

  "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed
  back, but it is generally owing to some kind of
  acident if one even notices the old woman under
  her load of sticks" know Orwell! Use Surnames only!
             You don't

  This quote by George shows that people care more
  about the donkeys than the people. It also shows
  the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that
  the donkey could have carried instead and I don't
  think it is fair either.
     You are meant to write in something called formal
   continuous prose… and that means no contractions!
P.E.E.

• Point
• Evidence
• Explanation
Point

• What point are you trying to make in the first place?

• How does the point relate to the main THEME(S) of
  the text?

• What is the best way of introducing your point?
Evidence

• Does your evidence really support or prove the
  point you are trying to make?

• How much of the quotation is actually needed?

• Have you presented the evidence correctly?
Explanation
• Unless you explain what your evidence
  shows, you are wasting your time.

• Your explanation needs to show or explain
  the relationship between the evidence and the
  point you are trying to make.

• Simplicity and clarity are always the best
  strategies.
Look... A Donkey!
• Let's look again at the
  quotation I've selected...

• 1st: What aspect of the
  THEME does it illustrate?

• 2nd: It's a long quotation…
  do we need to use all of it?

• 3rd: What point are you trying
  to make by using it?
Main Theme
The end of
colonialism is
inevitable...
Main Theme
The end of
colonialism is
inevitable...
PS: Morocco was a
French colony… Orwell
is British, but he was
visiting Morocco!
How To Use Quotations
"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its
galed back, but it is generally owing to some
kind of acident if one even notices the old
woman under her load of sticks"



First: MAKE SURE IT IS SPELLED CORRECTLY!
How To Use Quotations
"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its
galled back, but it is generally owing to some
kind of accident if one even notices the old
woman under her load of sticks"



First: MAKE SURE IT IS SPELLED CORRECTLY!
What Does The Quotation
 Illustrate… And How?
• It has to illustrate something related to the
  theme if it is to be worth using...



    Quickly write down what you think the
    quotation has to say about the MAIN
            THEME of the essay.
                  (2 minutes!)
What Does The Quotation
 Illustrate… And How?
• Which part of the quotation is actually the
  important bit?


Quickly select the word(s) that are actually
   related to the main theme. The skill is
  remembering that you want to use the
minimum of words from the original and are
      allowed to paraphrase the rest.
                 (2 minutes!)

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Marrakech Essay Redrafting

  • 2. How Not To Use Quotations "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed back, but it is generally owing to some kind of acident if one even notices the old woman under her load of sticks" This quote by George shows that people care more about the donkeys than the people. It also shows the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that the donkey could have carried instead and I don't think it is fair either.
  • 3. "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed back, but it is generally owing to some kind of acident if one even notices the old woman under her load of sticks" This quote by George shows that people care more about the donkeys than the people. It also shows the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that the donkey could have carried instead and I don't think it is fair either.
  • 4. Spelling Errors are You must always unforgivable in a introduce a quotation! quotation! "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed back, but it is generally owing to some kind of acident if one even notices the old woman under her load of sticks" know Orwell! Use Surnames only! You don't This quote by George shows that people care more about the donkeys than the people. It also shows the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that the donkey could have carried instead and I don't think it is fair either. You are meant to write in something called formal continuous prose… and that means no contractions!
  • 6. Point • What point are you trying to make in the first place? • How does the point relate to the main THEME(S) of the text? • What is the best way of introducing your point?
  • 7. Evidence • Does your evidence really support or prove the point you are trying to make? • How much of the quotation is actually needed? • Have you presented the evidence correctly?
  • 8. Explanation • Unless you explain what your evidence shows, you are wasting your time. • Your explanation needs to show or explain the relationship between the evidence and the point you are trying to make. • Simplicity and clarity are always the best strategies.
  • 9. Look... A Donkey! • Let's look again at the quotation I've selected... • 1st: What aspect of the THEME does it illustrate? • 2nd: It's a long quotation… do we need to use all of it? • 3rd: What point are you trying to make by using it?
  • 10. Main Theme The end of colonialism is inevitable...
  • 11. Main Theme The end of colonialism is inevitable... PS: Morocco was a French colony… Orwell is British, but he was visiting Morocco!
  • 12. How To Use Quotations "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed back, but it is generally owing to some kind of acident if one even notices the old woman under her load of sticks" First: MAKE SURE IT IS SPELLED CORRECTLY!
  • 13. How To Use Quotations "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galled back, but it is generally owing to some kind of accident if one even notices the old woman under her load of sticks" First: MAKE SURE IT IS SPELLED CORRECTLY!
  • 14. What Does The Quotation Illustrate… And How? • It has to illustrate something related to the theme if it is to be worth using... Quickly write down what you think the quotation has to say about the MAIN THEME of the essay. (2 minutes!)
  • 15. What Does The Quotation Illustrate… And How? • Which part of the quotation is actually the important bit? Quickly select the word(s) that are actually related to the main theme. The skill is remembering that you want to use the minimum of words from the original and are allowed to paraphrase the rest. (2 minutes!)