2. Starter:
What synonyms can you think of for the descriptive words in
the following?
All of you should be
able to think of at
least one synonym for
each key word in the
sentence
Most of you should be
able to use these
synonyms to re-write
the sentence in your
own words.
Some of you may be
able to identify some
issues with only using
synonyms to rewrite
sentences.
The worried man stood
protectively over the
quivering woman depriving
her of her freedom.
3. Question Three:
Some guidance on answering…
Question A will refer to Passage B and vice versa!
Write no more than half a page per section.
Aim for at least15-17 points across the two texts, divided roughly equally.
Focus only on the information asked for.
Group similar ideas together and write them up in your own words, using
discourse markers to link your ideas.
Marked for reading [15] and writing [5]
Do not copy from the text
Be specific in your information, not general statements.
Suggestions on dividing up your time…
10 min Source B 10 min Source A 25min to write up!
4. Question Three:
What’s it going to look like?
Summarise:
(a) The reasons children are not as adventurous today as described in Passage B
(b) The dangers Bear Grylls faced, as described in Passage A
Use your own words as far as possible
You should write about one side in total, allowing fro the size of your handwriting.
Up to 15 marks will be available for the content of your answer, and up to five
marks for the quality of your writing.
This will be our
focus!
5. Let’s have a go!
Passage B
We are going to do passage B as a class….
(a) The reasons children are not as adventurous today as described in Passage B
Tip one: turn the statement into a question to help you focus your hunt for information.
Tip two: write a summary of each point in the margin when you identify it!
Read through the article and
look for information…
Aim for 8 points.
6. Selecting the key information…
Why are children not as adventurous today?
Parents are nervous about exposing
them to any risks
Parents are going to extreme lengths
to protect their children from harm
Children are not allowed many of the
freedoms that were taken for granted
Becoming a social norm for younger
children to be allowed out only when
accompanied by an adult.
[Parents] have not got the time to
take children outside and if you do
not have the time to take them out
then they will spend more time on
the computer.
The majority of young people
questioned said that their biggest
adventures took place in playgrounds
The tendency to wrap children in
cotton wool has transformed how
they experience childhood.
Now… to organising them
You have two options:
Write up the points in the order that they appear using your own words; or
For higher marks group similar ideas together.
Can you spot the themes linking the points?
7. Practicing the skills:
Composing your answer…
Children are not as adventurous today because their
parents are worried that they will be injured, and so
becoming overprotective. In addition, they are even
going so far as to stop them from playing ordinary
games in the playground e.g. hide and seek.
Furthermore because parents are too busy, they can’t
take children out and many of them are not allowed
out without some adult supervision which stops them
being adventurous.
Discourse
markers to link
similar ideas
Use the statement to start
your paragraph
Synonyms to
show your
understanding
and use your
own words…
Theme One:
Parents
8. Practicing the skills:
Now working together…
We are going to compose the next point as a class, using what you have learnt.
Point rewrite linking discourse marker link to further point
“The majority of young people questioned said that their biggest adventures took place in
playgrounds.”
9. Practicing the skills:
Now working alone…
Task
Complete two more summary
points for this paragraph on your
own.
All of you should be able to
identify two more relevant points
Most of you should be able to
use synonyms to put the point(s)
into your own words.
Some of you should be able to
link the two remaining points to
produce one clear paragraph. .
10. Got the time?
B) The dangers Bear Grylls faced, as described in Passage A
Remember:
1. Turn the statement into
a question to focus your
notes
2. Read through and pick
out 7-8 points.
3. Group them into similar
ideas
4. Write them up, using
discourse markers, and
your own words.
Parents; children’s experiences; contrasts with their own.
Suggested response: The adventures the children can have are limited by the experiences they are allowed to have. Instead of running wild in trees etc. they are limited to playgrounds. Moreover, most of their adventures now take place in front of computers.