2. QUESTION 1: WHAT DO YOU LIKE ABOUT THE SYNOPSIS?
“Good descriptive writing to show events. ” W.P.
“Interesting dynamic brothers relationship, father and son relationship ” J.K.
“very emotive good idea.” B.G.
I gathered I wide range of answers, complimenting my amount of detail input. Also
they seemed to like my idea as well saying that it was emotive.
From this I gather confident response that my synopsis is interesting and put off in
a emotive manner, which was what I intended.
The issues of brother relationship and Father, Son relationship acknowledgment,
shows that I have made myself clear on what I am trying to represent, but also
makes me think on how I need to bold the issue of a lack of mother figure in there
life.
Altogether this has been a successful answered question as this makes me think, even
though it what’s good about it, it also tells me what I am trying to make clear isn't
very clear.

3. QUESTION 2: WHAT DIDN’T YOU LIKE ABOUT THE SYNOPSIS?
“to physiologically involved to much into there own heads ” J.K.
“Beginning to long and middle and end to short ” W. J.
“Didn’t understand the need of the family friend.” G.M.
From what I got back from this changed a lot of material n my synopsis, initially the
family friend was key but the change in my whole plot made him merely useless
and just confused the story. The removal of this character will make it no different
to the events, it even will grow a bigger representation of the family itself showing
cracks in foundation.
I can see what they mean about the prolonged intro, huge amounts of detail I packed
into it, but the drought of detail in the middle and end , ending almost sudden,
makes it feel sum what rushed.
In addition to the answers I will need to shorten the intro or even it out with the middle
and end, also the existence of the family friend is abolished. I will rewrite any parts
what are to in internally connected to the character.

4. QUESTION 3: HOW COULD I IMPROVE IT?
“The father figure could be more developed with the son.” G.S.
“Visually expressing their emotions instead of mentally.” J.K.
“Change structure of the story, so it is not weighted at the start.” J.G.
This shows me that the father figure hasn’t got a lot of importance which informs me
the character needs more depth to either show back ground through props or
enhancing his presence of his vices with sound.
Again, the visual and mental cross-over has grown from previous writing and has
become a habit, which will be over come by getting into the mind set of the style of