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Scholarly Crew Story Book Survey Results
Open-ended

Question 3:

This study skill presentation would be most helpful for students from Grade _____ to _______.

Answer:

 Showing 11 text responses

Seems to apply to middle schoolers and up indefinitely
11/16/2011 7:40 PM
take out the reference to 7th grade as I think it could be used from 5th - 9th grade
probably
11/15/2011 5:01 PM
Middle and High School
11/14/2011 6:38 PM
any middle school grade or even 9th graders
11/14/2011 1:26 PM
I can only guess here, but 6th or 7th
11/13/2011 8:25 PM
5
11/13/2011 7:05 PM
Middle School grades (6-8)
11/13/2011 3:24 PM
calendar
11/13/2011 2:05 PM
6-8
11/11/2011 11:35 PM
high school
11/11/2011 9:05 PM
7 - 12
11/11/2011 2:34 PM

Question 10:
Please provide any suggestions to improve our story book.

Showing 10 text responses

Double check that some of the information given by the coaches are not better suited in
the book's main body. Keep in mind that any key point that's not in the book itself may
be lost if it is printed in another medium, or the coaches are ignored by readers.
Conversely, sometimes the coach is saying exactly what is in the slide, but that is not
necessary because there is the text-read function for the book's content (that could be
highlighted with the coaches' introduction, e.g. pg 10). There are also a few grammatical
errors that need to be edited (incorrect tense, subject/verb agreement and spelling,
mostly), so do a good proofread. A few I noticed that might help you narrow it down are:
pg. 21 should read and be punctuated this way "No matter how well you learn, some
things simply must be memorized.", "...memorizing, there are..." Pg20 - Semicolon
instead of comma in bullet 2, and use 'lose' not 'loose' - "...them; most students LOSE the
information quickly if THEY don't use it." Pg12 - keep verb consistency use "...or TALK
while studying." In the coach's text 'develop' is spelled incorrectly, and you "...develop
good study habits" no 'a' is needed before 'good'. pg9 - Teri should use 'Let's' not 'Lets',
and a few commas are needed. pg2 - when introducing Leo, is his text intentionally
incorrect or is he supposed to say, "Hello/Heyloo, Leo will demonstrate to you how to be
a good note taker."
11/16/2011 7:40 PM

I really like the idea of having an interactive BookBuilder. Good luck on the rest of your
project.
11/15/2011 6:03 PM

Some of these questions were hard to qualify and it would have been helpful to have a
feedback option for several of them. For example the coaches. Well you only used the
coaches 5 times so I don't think they were helpful as they needed to be used more. The
pictures were good and the ones that referenced actual strategies and forms were useful.
Again rework the learning styles to possibly learning preferences related to particular
tasks. So if the task is memorization then here are strategies to help you and you can
decide on your preference for studying. if the task is to apply what you know then
straight memorization will not help but calls for a different kind of studying.
11/15/2011 5:01 PM

This is a great topic. The writing did seem a little squished together on some pages. I
think it may be easier to read if you skipped a few more lines (this was in the learning
styles section). overall, i think it is great and a great resource for the classroom!
11/14/2011 6:38 PM

I bet you are planning more graphics, but just in case it would be nice to have a graphic
on the pages without one!
11/13/2011 8:25 PM

Replace types of learners with more info. on study skills. Middle school may be too
young to explain types to.
11/13/2011 7:05 PM

General: I think you should change your title to include all middle school students. My
eighth graders could definitely benefit from this book!!! Page 2: You should make your
Table of Contents title bigger and bold. Page 4: nothing listed in the bulleted list. Page 6:
The graphic is a little confusing…the part that is most confusing is the arrow having to
do with Decay. Page 9: How does the reader input on the calendar? Where does the
information come from besides the agent? Page 11: Took quiz!! I love it!!! Page 19: You
may want to re-write point 1. I got it after several readings but I think you need to do
something with punctuation. Page 22: Graphic with no text
11/13/2011 3:24 PM

I thought the book was a little dry
11/13/2011 2:05 PM

I think that the graphics in the book could be more appealing to the viewer. Also, you
should use the coaches more and when you do, don't put so much information for the
viewer to read. I'm sure you probably already know this, but some of the pages are
missing a graphic and/or text. Other than those suggestions, great job on presenting
content that students need to know!
11/11/2011 11:35 PM

Great Job!!! I did see a few things, so don't think I'm being critical, I'm just a fresh pair
of eyes. There weren't sources annotated for the pictureson allot of the pages. Great use
of external links on pages 11 & 23. Consider rewriting the 2nd bullet on page 18; instead
of loose, use lose; and instead of "you don't use it", write "they don't use it". Page 19 had
some grammatical and punctuation errors, consider rewriting. Great job on the book, I
can tell you guys put allot of work into it. Again, please don't think I'm being too picky,
I'm just a fresh pair of eyes.
11/11/2011 2:34 PM

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Scholarly crew story book survey results

  • 1. Scholarly Crew Story Book Survey Results
  • 2.
  • 3.
  • 4. Open-ended Question 3: This study skill presentation would be most helpful for students from Grade _____ to _______. Answer: Showing 11 text responses Seems to apply to middle schoolers and up indefinitely 11/16/2011 7:40 PM take out the reference to 7th grade as I think it could be used from 5th - 9th grade probably 11/15/2011 5:01 PM Middle and High School 11/14/2011 6:38 PM any middle school grade or even 9th graders 11/14/2011 1:26 PM I can only guess here, but 6th or 7th 11/13/2011 8:25 PM 5 11/13/2011 7:05 PM Middle School grades (6-8) 11/13/2011 3:24 PM calendar 11/13/2011 2:05 PM 6-8 11/11/2011 11:35 PM
  • 5. high school 11/11/2011 9:05 PM 7 - 12 11/11/2011 2:34 PM Question 10: Please provide any suggestions to improve our story book. Showing 10 text responses Double check that some of the information given by the coaches are not better suited in the book's main body. Keep in mind that any key point that's not in the book itself may be lost if it is printed in another medium, or the coaches are ignored by readers. Conversely, sometimes the coach is saying exactly what is in the slide, but that is not necessary because there is the text-read function for the book's content (that could be highlighted with the coaches' introduction, e.g. pg 10). There are also a few grammatical errors that need to be edited (incorrect tense, subject/verb agreement and spelling, mostly), so do a good proofread. A few I noticed that might help you narrow it down are: pg. 21 should read and be punctuated this way "No matter how well you learn, some things simply must be memorized.", "...memorizing, there are..." Pg20 - Semicolon instead of comma in bullet 2, and use 'lose' not 'loose' - "...them; most students LOSE the information quickly if THEY don't use it." Pg12 - keep verb consistency use "...or TALK while studying." In the coach's text 'develop' is spelled incorrectly, and you "...develop good study habits" no 'a' is needed before 'good'. pg9 - Teri should use 'Let's' not 'Lets', and a few commas are needed. pg2 - when introducing Leo, is his text intentionally incorrect or is he supposed to say, "Hello/Heyloo, Leo will demonstrate to you how to be a good note taker." 11/16/2011 7:40 PM I really like the idea of having an interactive BookBuilder. Good luck on the rest of your project. 11/15/2011 6:03 PM Some of these questions were hard to qualify and it would have been helpful to have a feedback option for several of them. For example the coaches. Well you only used the coaches 5 times so I don't think they were helpful as they needed to be used more. The pictures were good and the ones that referenced actual strategies and forms were useful. Again rework the learning styles to possibly learning preferences related to particular tasks. So if the task is memorization then here are strategies to help you and you can decide on your preference for studying. if the task is to apply what you know then straight memorization will not help but calls for a different kind of studying. 11/15/2011 5:01 PM This is a great topic. The writing did seem a little squished together on some pages. I think it may be easier to read if you skipped a few more lines (this was in the learning styles section). overall, i think it is great and a great resource for the classroom!
  • 6. 11/14/2011 6:38 PM I bet you are planning more graphics, but just in case it would be nice to have a graphic on the pages without one! 11/13/2011 8:25 PM Replace types of learners with more info. on study skills. Middle school may be too young to explain types to. 11/13/2011 7:05 PM General: I think you should change your title to include all middle school students. My eighth graders could definitely benefit from this book!!! Page 2: You should make your Table of Contents title bigger and bold. Page 4: nothing listed in the bulleted list. Page 6: The graphic is a little confusing…the part that is most confusing is the arrow having to do with Decay. Page 9: How does the reader input on the calendar? Where does the information come from besides the agent? Page 11: Took quiz!! I love it!!! Page 19: You may want to re-write point 1. I got it after several readings but I think you need to do something with punctuation. Page 22: Graphic with no text 11/13/2011 3:24 PM I thought the book was a little dry 11/13/2011 2:05 PM I think that the graphics in the book could be more appealing to the viewer. Also, you should use the coaches more and when you do, don't put so much information for the viewer to read. I'm sure you probably already know this, but some of the pages are missing a graphic and/or text. Other than those suggestions, great job on presenting content that students need to know! 11/11/2011 11:35 PM Great Job!!! I did see a few things, so don't think I'm being critical, I'm just a fresh pair of eyes. There weren't sources annotated for the pictureson allot of the pages. Great use of external links on pages 11 & 23. Consider rewriting the 2nd bullet on page 18; instead of loose, use lose; and instead of "you don't use it", write "they don't use it". Page 19 had some grammatical and punctuation errors, consider rewriting. Great job on the book, I can tell you guys put allot of work into it. Again, please don't think I'm being too picky, I'm just a fresh pair of eyes. 11/11/2011 2:34 PM