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Your Name Austin Shettler
Your Topic Serengeti
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Thesis Statement
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I believe that... the Serengeti is the best place in the world to go and explore.
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Your Subtopics
Topic Why is the Serengeti Topic The wildlife in the Topic
The great migrations.
1 important? 2 Serengeti. 3
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2. Topic 1 Why is the Serengeti important to geography?
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The Serengeti is important to geography because its one of the biggest National
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Parks around in Africa.
your reader?
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Support #1
The Serengeti is a National Park it is a huge plain where animals travel through to
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migrate and for calving.
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Support #2
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Support #3
Most scientists go to examine the different behaviors in the area so they can understand
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the species better than before.
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You should go see the Serengeti because it is the number one place to find
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all kinds of different animals at once.
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3. Topic 2 The wildlife in the Serengeti.
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to introduce this topic to What is the wildlife like in the Serengeti?
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Support #1 In the Serengeti they have said that the most commonly seen animals are the Zebras,
1-5 sentences Lions, Giraffes, Cheetahs and Hyenas. Watching the carnivores run after the antelope
Need a transition word? would be pretty sweet to see on the first you go and visit.
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Support #2 Some other animals that you can see at different times of the year are the crested
1-5 sentences porcupine, the crocodile, crowned crane, elephants and different kinds of monkeys. This
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Support #3 As far as we can tell as of right now there are about 150 different species of animals that
1-5 sentences migrate through the Serengeti at different times of the year. Now does that sound like fun
Need a transition word? going and watching all the different animals and see what there behaviors are.
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That sounds like it would be sweet to do now lets talk about the
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migrations in the Serengeti.
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4. Topic 3 The great migrations.
What is one good sentence
to introduce this topic to Another thing that would be sweet to see would be the different migrations.
your reader?
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Support #1
1-5 sentences Different animals all year around migrate through the Serengeti.
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Support #2 Depending on the different times of the year are when different animals come through.
1-5 sentences For example in the beginning of the year you may see a monkey or two. Then you come
Need a transition word? back during the middle and see antelope or crocodiles in some parts.
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Support #3 The time of year is an issue and the different areas of the Serengeti. Some areas have
1-5 sentences elephants when others may have lions and hyenas it all depends on when and where
Need a transition word? though. They also migrate so they can have there young which is good and not good. Its
good because they are repopulating, bad because that's when the predators run through
and eat them to survive.
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5. Introduction Paragraph
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1) How can I get my reader's attention?
2) Imagine your reader knows nothing about your topic. What background information could I give my reader about
my topic?
3) Why should the reader care to know this information?
4) What is it you are trying to prove?
Attention Getter
1 Sentence
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Background Information
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- Introduce your topic, but not
your thesis
- Provide insider details that
would help your reader better
understand your topic, without
providing information you are
discussing in your support.
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Why should your reader care?
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It is important that you read this
essay because...
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Thesis Statement
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6. Conclusion Paragraph
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A conclusion should...
1) Include a brief summary of the paper's main points.
2) Suggest results or consequences
3) Leave a lasting impression
Restate your thesis in
a fresh, new way
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Summarize / Reflect / Give
Final thoughts on Topic 1
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Final thoughts on Topic 2
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Final thoughts on Topic 3
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Final Thought
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-Contains vivid language
-Compound or Complex sentence
-Leave a lasting impression
-Sums up your essay in one
incredible sentence
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- Background Information - Support 1 - Summarize/Reflect/Final - Topic 1
- Why should we care sentence - Support 2 - Summarize/Reflect/Final - Topic 2
- Thesis Statement - Support 3 - Summarize/Reflect/Final - Topic 3
- Transition - Strong Final Thought
Paragraph 2 - Body Paragraph 1
Paragraph 4 - Body Paragraph 3 Final page - Bibliography
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- Support 1 - Topic Introduction - Titled - Bibliography
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- Support 3 - Support 2 - MLA Format
- Transition - Support 3 - Alphabetized
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