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Revising and Rewriting
“Big Deals”




Thesis   Tone   Audience   Purpose   Style   Support
“The Basics”

Mechanics

Grammar

Syntax

Spelling
Order of Operations


                                 Peer review
   Focus to                        as well as    Check for
  those Big                       self editing   grammar
                 Organization
 Deal items                     for cohesion,       and
listed above                    organization     mechanics
                                 and support
THESIS
Did I say anything…
    Interesting?
    Useful?
    New or risky?
    Important to the reader and
    also to me, the writer?
PURPOSE




Why am I writing?

What do I hope to accomplish?

What do I want the reader to do?
Audience:
 Consistent
Throughout?
TONE
Is this tone
touching/interesting/
compelling/powerful
? this tone interesting/compelling?
Is
            How does
this tone serve my serve my purpose?
How does this tone
purpose?
            How does
How does thisout to reach out to my
this tone reach
                tone
audience?
my audience?
SUPPORT
Have you given your
                       audience enough
                       information?


Are there gaps in
                                               Is your support
 your reasoning,
                                                 consistently
areas that require
                                               supporting your
more or stronger
                                                    thesis?
  explanation?




                                                Are there
    Is your support
                                            contradictions? If
       logical and
                                             so, how do you
        cohesive?
                                             explain them?
The Basics
Switching from writer-centered to
         reader-centered
a
R
    l
e
    o
a
    u
d
    d
        Why?
Coherence and cohesion




Underline main points…
Peer feedback
Verb tense



CONSISTENT




                  CORRECT
Clear pronoun usage
Unclear Pronoun Use


            FRESH MEAT!
The butcher kills himself twice weekly.
Better way to say that?



                FRESH MEAT!
The butcher slaughters his stock twice weekly
CUT WORDINESS!



Remove the clutter
Put your
extra
words
on a diet
Proofread
“Whether” VS “weather”

                 “there”
                 “their”
                “they’re”
You deserve a reward for
 completing the revision
       process…

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