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Assignment 11
Group Presentation
Draft 4

2. Kaya Sumbland Sanel Homer A
Rahel Fasil Gia Alveranga

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DRAFT TWO FEEDBACK
DRAFT 2 FEEDBACK

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TEACHER ASSESSMENT (draft 3)

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PEER ASSESSMENT (draft 3) BY
DEBBIE, MARIA & MILKA

6. Kaya Sumbland - D Record of Grade for draft 1
What Went Well: (Individual)
• Clear presentation and organisation
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Excellent structure
Good understanding B
Even Better If:
• More detail
• Use more images
• Take real pictures of characters
Targets to Improve:
• To explain my points in a PEE structure and use a verity of images.
Sanel Homer - U
What Went Well:
• Good organisation
• Nice diagrams
• Good understanding of chosen theme
Even Better If:
• Relate my pictures to the words
• Less text
• More detail
Targets to Improve:
• Make sure my diagrams are not to basic and shorted lengthy paragraphs into bullet points.

7. Record of Grade for draft 1 B
(Individual)
Gia Alveranga - U
No work handed in
Rahel Fasil - E
What Went Well:
• Short brief points
Even Better If:
• Use titles for slides
• More detail
• Make sure I present my knowledge more clearly
Targets to Improve:
• Use more images and less text

8. Kaya & Sanel
Record of Grade for draft 1
Presentation Level – D- Group B
What went well?
• Showing progress and achievement
• Slides have good organisation
• Good effort and creativity
• Good start to conventions
Even better if?
• Colour code should be background
• Title all the slides
• More contribution from Sanel, Rahel and Gia
• Don’t read from the screen
Targets to improve…
• To make sure all group members contribute
• Write our presentation with more detail and understanding
• To word our idea’s better

9. Kaya & Sanel
Decisions and Revisions C
Since our first draft, we’ve changed our idea a lot.
DRAFT 1 :
• Thriller genre
• Based on a girl who had schizophrenia and thought she
was possessed
• Too complicated and sent out the wrong message about
the mental illness.
DRAFT 2 :
• Completely same idea
• Mental illness taken out – wrong message
• Replaced with actually being possessed

10. Kaya & Sanel
Decisions and Revisions C
CHANGE IN IDEA :
• We decided to change idea completely
• Drama genre
• We did research again on conventions
• We want to connect with the audience
• New idea was a girl’s life on drugs and her hallucinations
ALTERED IDEA :
• Idea suits more to a thriller
• Change drugs to mental illness
• Hallucination - > Bizarre delusions
• Change to psychological thriller
• Alter flashbacks to match new concept
• Girl with schizophrenia who is being emotionally
connected to toys from her real parents

11. Kaya
Decisions and Revisions C
HOW THE CHANGES HAVE HELPED:
• Explored various genre’s creating a varied
understanding of the differences
• Wider understanding of different themes and
topics
• Exercise our creativity and to stimulate greater
idea’s each time
Our changes in pictures!!

12. Kaya & Sanel
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Genre – Psychological Thriller
• Our genre has changed because all of our thriller and drama ideas
always somehow turned into a psychological battle for the
character
• We feel psychological thriller is the most interesting genre for most
15 + audiences
• We all agreed that doing a psychological thriller would be the best
genre for us because we can relate it to real life while still adding a
bit of controversy.

13. Kaya
Genre – Psychological thriller
• Related to the mind or process of the mind
Psychological : • Suspense comes from one character
• Conflict with their or others mind
• Focus on intense action or plot
Thriller : • Emphasized character or plot for suspense
• Character rely on their mental recourses rather than
physical
Psychological
• Battle for equilibrium in their own mind
Thriller :
• Suspense is created through characters mind or upon
their mind

14. Kaya
D Example of a psychological thriller film
Donnie Darko - 2001
Daunting bizarre Being told what The main character
delusional to do from the doesn't realise the
character only delusional difference between
seen by the main character thinking reality and pretend
character its right

15. Sanel
Example of a physiological thriller film
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The Black Swan (2010)
This is a physiological thriller film
because Nina the swan princess had a
trauma-based mind control where
what she was imagining seemed real
and so the mind control in the Black
Swan can relate to reality as we could
understand how they can interconnect
and relate to some of the harsh
realities of professional entertainment
industry.