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Marking Exercise on Sound and Editing
(These scripts were part of the OCR Get Ahead INSET Training sessions in
autumn 2009 and used in the context of sound and editing marking exercises)

Page numbers refer to the page numbers on the bottom of the exam scripts.

Candidate A - Sound and Editing

Continuity editing is used to show the different reactions of the people present in
the room (top of page 4).

The candidate begins with: “The shot-reverse shot between Martha and the man
allows the audience to see the fear on her face and the joy on his by using close-
ups. It then jump cuts to the Doctor being placed at a high angle to show his
isolation and helplessness as he is caged. This allows the audience to
sympathise with him. Furthermore, it is reinforced when the scene jump cuts to
Martha to show the concern on her face about him”.

Candidate: “Although she (Martha) is placed at a high angle as she speaks, the
audience can easily relate to her as she shows more knowledge than the man
himself. Her power is also defined when she stands and speaks up to the man.
The close up of the ticking stopwatch also conveys to the audience the
importance of time in that scene and how she was managing it efficiently”.

Comment: this is proficient analysis and argument, relevant to the question
set.

The candidate then continues: “The scene suddenly erase (s) the female
assumptions made about her and despite being placed as a high angle, she is
shown to be smart and firm, which might be represented of women in the modern
era”

This argument is continued at the top of page 5, start of the first paragraph:

“Her intelligence is also emphasised when the fade to white editing shows the
temporal change as she narrates what she had done in the past. The mise en
scène utilises low-key lighting and the cold she was suffering from when she
went on the mission. A connotation of that might be that women face a lot of
struggle in their lives.”

Comment: the candidate has clearly sustained a proficient/ excellent response
by reference to and analysis of the representation of gender. In the above
passage the candidate has clearly been discriminating with her choice of
examples and used a range from the editing, thought about how editing reflects
the narrative and linked this to another key concept, mise en scène – this meets
level four criteria.
The candidate continues on page 5: “The sound bridging continues to show the
loss of power of the man as the door rises. He is framed in a one-shot to show
that he is suddenly alone as the scene jump cuts to the other characters in two-
shots. His (the master) loss of power is also reinforced by the use of high angle
that allows the audience to look down to him. Whilst the caged doctor is
suddenly placed in a low angle to show that he has power over him. This might
establish the fact that a man who is loved, trusted and respected has more power
towards another one who works for his self interest.”

Comment: Again this is analytical and displays a level 4 response –a range of
examples have been used throughout the candidate’s response, as has a
discussion of a range of gender representations.

Overall this response is a low level four – some improvement is needed in
the use of media terminology. It demonstrates how a candidate engages
with the concepts of sound and editing.


Candidate B – Sound and Editing

The candidate’s analysis of editing starts at the top of page 5, in reference to
cross cutting and in the next paragraph, insert of shots of the clock ticking, the
“time is counting down and the diegetic sound creates suspense and tension, as
does the dialogue”.

The candidate then argues: The man says “ I love the sound of the ticking”.
implying that something significant is about to happen. The script continues, “ the
non diegetic music is parallel to the diegetic sound because it matches the mood
and emphasises the suspense. The dialogue of the man again shows power over
the woman as she looks helplessly on”

Comment: The candidate uses terminology well and has command of this in
analysis of this part of the sequence. However, the response could be developed
further with reference to more specific examples.

However, we cannot judge this candidate’s response too early:

Comment: The next paragraph at the bottom of page 5, then discusses the
pacing of the editing and the centrality and positioning of the female, as narrator
to the extract – indeed the candidate recognises, albeit implicitly about the
importance of the female gender in the extract.

At the top of page 6, the candidate for about half a page, cleverly incorporates
editing and sound in analysis of the representation of gender. This is detailed
and thorough analysis of the sequence and meets level 4 criteria.
The analysis of the sequence on page 7 represents a sustained and
commanding analysis of the extract and exemplifies how a candidate can provide
an integrated response to the question set. The candidate has also explored a
full range of representation of gender in the response.

Overall, this is a well-balanced analytical and detailed response to the extract
set. It is sustained throughout in analysis of the concept of representation using
all four technical aspects of the TV drama.

For AS level Media Studies, this is clearly a sustained argument. It is selective
and discriminating in its use of examples, with a confident and highly accurate
use of media terminology.

This is a level four response, which displays excellent evaluation, analysis and
argument, detailed use of examples and excellent terminology. It is also
comparable to candidate A above – though better in terms of clarity of expression
and with the use of media terminology.


Candidate C – Sound and Editing

In contrast, the third candidate is basic in addressing the issue of sound and
editing. On page 3, sound is addressed almost superficially, from about nine
lines up from the bottom of the page. This is perhaps epitomised by the final
sentence “ As the woman starts to talk more, the non diegetic music aids her and
it gets louder and more powerful”.

The candidate comments on editing at the top of page four, when the candidate
recognises the editing technique ‘flashbacks’. Here the correct editing is
identified but there is a small attempt to link the technique to the analysis of
gender.

Again this is exemplified when the candidate argues, “this is shown by the slightly
slowed editing and her facial expressions and body language”. Once again the
candidate attempts to engage with the issue of editing as a technical feature, but
shows basic knowledge and understanding of concept. The final comment
on editing is a description of editing as ‘morphing’ – not entirely a legitimate
editing concept and does make a basic attempt to link it to the concept of
representation.

This candidate response shows a bottom level three understanding and
analysis of the concept of representation used in the extract. However there is
imbalance in the coverage of the technical areas – very little, minimal on sound
and basic analysis of the use of editing.
As a result the candidate received a top-level two mark for the use of examples,
and a competent mark for the use of media terminology.

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  • 19. Marking Exercise on Sound and Editing (These scripts were part of the OCR Get Ahead INSET Training sessions in autumn 2009 and used in the context of sound and editing marking exercises) Page numbers refer to the page numbers on the bottom of the exam scripts. Candidate A - Sound and Editing Continuity editing is used to show the different reactions of the people present in the room (top of page 4). The candidate begins with: “The shot-reverse shot between Martha and the man allows the audience to see the fear on her face and the joy on his by using close- ups. It then jump cuts to the Doctor being placed at a high angle to show his isolation and helplessness as he is caged. This allows the audience to sympathise with him. Furthermore, it is reinforced when the scene jump cuts to Martha to show the concern on her face about him”. Candidate: “Although she (Martha) is placed at a high angle as she speaks, the audience can easily relate to her as she shows more knowledge than the man himself. Her power is also defined when she stands and speaks up to the man. The close up of the ticking stopwatch also conveys to the audience the importance of time in that scene and how she was managing it efficiently”. Comment: this is proficient analysis and argument, relevant to the question set. The candidate then continues: “The scene suddenly erase (s) the female assumptions made about her and despite being placed as a high angle, she is shown to be smart and firm, which might be represented of women in the modern era” This argument is continued at the top of page 5, start of the first paragraph: “Her intelligence is also emphasised when the fade to white editing shows the temporal change as she narrates what she had done in the past. The mise en scène utilises low-key lighting and the cold she was suffering from when she went on the mission. A connotation of that might be that women face a lot of struggle in their lives.” Comment: the candidate has clearly sustained a proficient/ excellent response by reference to and analysis of the representation of gender. In the above passage the candidate has clearly been discriminating with her choice of examples and used a range from the editing, thought about how editing reflects the narrative and linked this to another key concept, mise en scène – this meets level four criteria.
  • 20. The candidate continues on page 5: “The sound bridging continues to show the loss of power of the man as the door rises. He is framed in a one-shot to show that he is suddenly alone as the scene jump cuts to the other characters in two- shots. His (the master) loss of power is also reinforced by the use of high angle that allows the audience to look down to him. Whilst the caged doctor is suddenly placed in a low angle to show that he has power over him. This might establish the fact that a man who is loved, trusted and respected has more power towards another one who works for his self interest.” Comment: Again this is analytical and displays a level 4 response –a range of examples have been used throughout the candidate’s response, as has a discussion of a range of gender representations. Overall this response is a low level four – some improvement is needed in the use of media terminology. It demonstrates how a candidate engages with the concepts of sound and editing. Candidate B – Sound and Editing The candidate’s analysis of editing starts at the top of page 5, in reference to cross cutting and in the next paragraph, insert of shots of the clock ticking, the “time is counting down and the diegetic sound creates suspense and tension, as does the dialogue”. The candidate then argues: The man says “ I love the sound of the ticking”. implying that something significant is about to happen. The script continues, “ the non diegetic music is parallel to the diegetic sound because it matches the mood and emphasises the suspense. The dialogue of the man again shows power over the woman as she looks helplessly on” Comment: The candidate uses terminology well and has command of this in analysis of this part of the sequence. However, the response could be developed further with reference to more specific examples. However, we cannot judge this candidate’s response too early: Comment: The next paragraph at the bottom of page 5, then discusses the pacing of the editing and the centrality and positioning of the female, as narrator to the extract – indeed the candidate recognises, albeit implicitly about the importance of the female gender in the extract. At the top of page 6, the candidate for about half a page, cleverly incorporates editing and sound in analysis of the representation of gender. This is detailed and thorough analysis of the sequence and meets level 4 criteria.
  • 21. The analysis of the sequence on page 7 represents a sustained and commanding analysis of the extract and exemplifies how a candidate can provide an integrated response to the question set. The candidate has also explored a full range of representation of gender in the response. Overall, this is a well-balanced analytical and detailed response to the extract set. It is sustained throughout in analysis of the concept of representation using all four technical aspects of the TV drama. For AS level Media Studies, this is clearly a sustained argument. It is selective and discriminating in its use of examples, with a confident and highly accurate use of media terminology. This is a level four response, which displays excellent evaluation, analysis and argument, detailed use of examples and excellent terminology. It is also comparable to candidate A above – though better in terms of clarity of expression and with the use of media terminology. Candidate C – Sound and Editing In contrast, the third candidate is basic in addressing the issue of sound and editing. On page 3, sound is addressed almost superficially, from about nine lines up from the bottom of the page. This is perhaps epitomised by the final sentence “ As the woman starts to talk more, the non diegetic music aids her and it gets louder and more powerful”. The candidate comments on editing at the top of page four, when the candidate recognises the editing technique ‘flashbacks’. Here the correct editing is identified but there is a small attempt to link the technique to the analysis of gender. Again this is exemplified when the candidate argues, “this is shown by the slightly slowed editing and her facial expressions and body language”. Once again the candidate attempts to engage with the issue of editing as a technical feature, but shows basic knowledge and understanding of concept. The final comment on editing is a description of editing as ‘morphing’ – not entirely a legitimate editing concept and does make a basic attempt to link it to the concept of representation. This candidate response shows a bottom level three understanding and analysis of the concept of representation used in the extract. However there is imbalance in the coverage of the technical areas – very little, minimal on sound and basic analysis of the use of editing.
  • 22. As a result the candidate received a top-level two mark for the use of examples, and a competent mark for the use of media terminology.