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Shaping Sheet
1. Jordan Grandt and Cristina Gonzalez
Honors 10th World Literature and Composition
Mrs. Lester and Ms. Hamilton
16 April 2012
Shaping Sheet
Intro
[slide] addiction in veterans.
[slide] Thesis: How can addiction be proven as a legitimate disease? Addiction in veterans should be
considered a mental illness by the military. Ways to prove addiction as a disease are how they connect
to other mental illnesses, as well as how they affect the brain.
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[slide]Topic Sentence: How can addiction be proven as a disease to the military?
1.*slide+Concrete Detail: The “Disease Model” is used to prove and understand whether or not
something is considered a legitimate disease. This is used by doctors and scientists all over the world to
determine the view of a situation. (McCauley)
Commentary: This model says that as long as you have an organ that gets a physical, cellular defect, and
as a result, you see symptoms, it is called a disease. (McCauley)
[slide] Commentary: These symptoms differ only by severity or stage of illness.
Commentary: The disease model “strips away the nonsense about personality and social environment.”
Commentary: With addiction, you see all of these, with brain cells and symptoms. (McCauley)
[slide] Commentary:These symptoms are prevalent in veterans addicted to substances.
2. [slide]Concrete Detail: The behaviors and relapses are considered common for a chronic disease.
(Neergaard)
Commentary: Frustrating relapses are known for being related to chronic diseases. (Neergaard)
2. [slide]Commentary: Also, most drug related prison sentences end in relapses, so many punishments do
not help in the long run.
Commentary: Since relapses are so common in addiction, along with other chronic diseases, we believe
that there should be treatment for these individuals instead of just punishment. (Brooks)
[slide]Commentary: People with mental illnesses, such as schizophrenia, are pardoned from
punishments such as jail and are sent to mental treatment.
Commentary: Why should one disease get treatment, but not addiction?
3. [slide]Concrete Detail: Like many other diseases, addiction has no cure, but has many triggers.
(Brooks)
Commentary: Stress plays a huge part in addiction, just like many other diseases. (McCauley)
Commentary: Veterans have a huge chance for triggers, such as stress in daily life, as well as other
known triggers.
*slide+Commentary: A “cure” for addiction is not available; however the disease can be managed with
coping skills. (Brooks)
Commentary: Many diseases do not have cures, like addiction. The military should provide more
successful treatment options for addiction.
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[slide] Topic Sentence: How do mental illnesses in veterans connect to addiction?
1. [slide]Concrete Detail: Doctors have recently been prescribing addicting pharmaceuticals to veterans
with PTSD and other mental illnesses. (Brooks)
Commentary: Veterans are being prescribed more and more opioids, such as OxyContin, Percocet and
Vicodin (Brooks).
Commentary: “...healing from the traumas of war is a process that continues over years of work and
needs more than a Band Aid.” (Stovroff)
3. [slide] Commentary: These drugs do not treat the root of the problem of psychological issues, but often
lead to addiction. (Brooks)
Commentary: If these addictive pills were controlled more instead of being prescribed all of the time,
addiction in veterans would be less of an issue.
2. [slide]Concrete Detail: 140,000 veterans returning home from Iraq and Afghanistan were diagnosed
with some sort of pain. (Kounang)
Commentary: The severity of these veterans experience during war time plays a major role in this
statistical evidence.
[slide]Commentary: Mental disorders, such as depression or drug and alcohol abuse, were very common
among these veterans. (Kounang)
Commentary: These veterans were 2.4 more times likely to be prescribed opioid painkillers than
veterans without any mental health diagnosis. (Kounang)
3. [slide]Concrete Detail: Nick, an Army infantryman, was suffering from depression and other mental
illnesses when he tried to kill himself with heroin (Hahn).
Commentary: After many tragic things in his life, brought about by life and the military, Nick became
addicted to heroin, a deadly drug.
[slide] Commentary: The military did nothing to prevent this from happening, despite it being common
throughout all branches of the military.
Commentary: He only tried heroin as a way to end the mental illnesses and pain brought about by his
experiences in joining the military during wartime.
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[slide]Topic Sentence: How does addiction in veterans affect the brain?
1. [slide]Concrete Detail: The brain's reward system as dopamine is released when one is addicted to
something and uses it regularly. (Neergaard)
4. Commentary: Eventually, the brain’s dopamine levels get so used to this addiction that it is no longer
pleasurable, even though the person is still addicted.
Commentary: This happens to people who are addicted to very long, until there is never enough of the
substance to get the same feeling as it once did.
[slide]Commentary: These levels become routine and ritual among the brain.
Commentary: This leads to more severe cases of addiction in both veterans and civilians.
2. [slide]Concrete Detail: Persistent stress releases hormones such as CRF.
[slide]Commentary: CRF acts on genes for dopamine neurotransmission.
Commentary: People under this severe stress increase their risk-taking behavior in the search of relief.
Commentary: This can be in addition to dangerous substances such as drugs and alcohol.
[slide]Commentary: Veterans are under obvious, severe stress from their surroundings and civilian life.
3. [slide]Concrete Detail: Dopamine is released in the midbrain whenever substances are used.
Commentary: Once the substance is used, and dopamine levels are high, the brain tags this item as a
survival mechanism.
Commentary: After this, the user is unable to derive normal pleasure like they were before.
[slide] Commentary: The person's life becomes solely devoted to this “survival mechanism.”
Conclusion: [slide] Addiction should be considered a disease by the military due to the many facts that
include it as a legitimate disease.